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@@ -9,25 +9,26 @@ date=2022-04-04
 
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-Two months ago, we were impressed by the success of our open beta launch at the FOSDEM and on Hacker News: [our intial post](https://garagehq.deuxfleurs.fr/blog/2022-introducing-garage/) lead to more than 40k views in 10 days, going up to 100 views/minute.
-Since this event, we continued improving Garage, and 2 months after the initial release, we are happy to announce a new version: v0.7.0.
-Before all, we would like to thank all the contributors that made this new release possible: Alex, Jill, Max Audron, Maximilien, Quentin, Rune Henrisken, Steam, and trinity-1686a.
-This is also the first time for Garage that we have contributions from the outside: we are very happy as we want to build a community-driven project.
+Two months ago, we were impressed by the success of our open beta launch at FOSDEM and on Hacker News: [our intial post](https://garagehq.deuxfleurs.fr/blog/2022-introducing-garage/) lead to more than 40k views in 10 days, going up to 100 views/minute.
+Since this event, we continued to improve Garage, and - 2 months after the initial release - we are happy to announce version 0.7.0.
 
-If you want to test this new version, you have 2 solutions: using our binaries or the ones from your OS.
-We ship [statically compiled binaries](https://garagehq.deuxfleurs.fr/download/) for Linux (amd64, i386, aarch64 and armv6) and their associated [Docker containers](https://hub.docker.com/u/dxflrs).
-Garage is also packaged by some OS/distributions, we are currently aware of [FreeBSD](https://cgit.freebsd.org/ports/tree/www/garage/Makefile) and [AUR for Arch Linux](https://aur.archlinux.org/packages/garage).
-Feel free to [reach us](mailto:garagehq@deuxfleurs.fr) if you are packaging or planning to package Garage, we are willing to adapt our software to make packaging easier and we plan to reference your work in our documentation. 
+But first, we would like to thank the contributors that made this new release possible: Alex, Jill, Max Audron, Maximilien, Quentin, Rune Henrisken, Steam, and trinity-1686a.
+This is also our first time welcoming contributors external to the core team, and as we wish for Garage to be a community-driven project, we encourage it.
+
+As a noverlty as well, you can get this release using our binaries or the package provided by your distribution.
+We ship [statically compiled binaries](https://garagehq.deuxfleurs.fr/download/) for most Linux architectures (amd64, i386, aarch64 and armv6) and associated [Docker containers](https://hub.docker.com/u/dxflrs).
+Garage now is also packaged by third parties on some OS/distributions. We are currently aware of [FreeBSD](https://cgit.freebsd.org/ports/tree/www/garage/Makefile) and [AUR for Arch Linux](https://aur.archlinux.org/packages/garage).
+Feel free to [reach us](mailto:garagehq@deuxfleurs.fr) if you are packaging (or planning to package) Garage, we welcome maintainers and will upstream specific patches if that can help. If you already did package garage, tell us and we'll add it to the documentation.
 
 Speaking about the changes of this new version, it obviously includes many bug fixes. 
 We listed them in our [changelogs](https://git.deuxfleurs.fr/Deuxfleurs/garage/releases), take a look, we might have fixed something that annoyed you!
-In this blog post, we want to introduce you to another aspect of this new release, its 2 new features: a better Kubernetes integration and support for OpenTelemetry.
+Besides bugfixes, there is two new features: a better Kubernetes integration and support for OpenTelemetry.
 
 ## Kubernetes integration
 
-Before Garage v0.7.0, you had to deploy a Consul cluster or spawn a coordinating pod to deploy Garage on Kubernetes.
-In this new version, Garage integrates a method to discover other peers by using Kubernetes [Custom Resources](https://kubernetes.io/docs/concepts/extend-kubernetes/api-extension/custom-resources/) to ease your deployments.
-Garage is even able to automatically create the [Custom Resource Definition](https://kubernetes.io/docs/tasks/extend-kubernetes/custom-resources/custom-resource-definitions/) (CRD) before using it to discover other peers.
+Before Garage v0.7.0, you had to deploy a Consul cluster or spawn a "coordinating" pod to deploy Garage on Kubernetes.
+In this new version, Garage integrates a method to discover other peers by using Kubernetes [Custom Resources](https://kubernetes.io/docs/concepts/extend-kubernetes/api-extension/custom-resources/) to simplify cluster discovery.
+Garage can self-apply the [Custom Resource Definition](https://kubernetes.io/docs/tasks/extend-kubernetes/custom-resources/custom-resource-definitions/) (CRD) to your cluster, or you can manage it manually.
 
 Let's see practically how it works with a minimalistic example (not secured nor suitable for production). 
 You can run it on [minikube](https://minikube.sigs.k8s.io) if you a more interactive reading.
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 The 3 important parameters are `kubernetes_namespace`, `kubernetes_service_name`, and `kubernetes_skip_crd`.
 Configure them according to your planned deployment. 
-The last one controls wether you want to create the CRD manually or allow Garage to create it automatically on boot.
+The last one controls wether you want to create the CRD manually or allow Garage to create it automatically on startup.
 In this example, we keep it to `false`, which means we allow Garage to automatically create the CRD.
 
 Apply this configuration on your cluster: